Getting down and dirty for this week's 100 Word Song Challenge. Lance from myblogcanbeatupyourblog, has invited Julia to pick the song this week, and her choice was "Criminal" by Fiona Apple. Rules are to use the song, title or feeling as a prompt and write something in exactly 100 words.
"Foolish girl, that’s what she had been three years or more
accurately, a lifetime ago. At sixteen, she thought she knew, at nineteen she knew
too much. She looked at him. First as her savior, then as her keeper. Now, as
nothing more than a business partner. She took the chances, he took the money.
And she earned a lot of it. She was good at what she did,
and there wasn't anything she wouldn't do. Soon it would be time to go it alone
and he would need to be gone…permanently. Yes, she knew how to do that too."
...and there you go.
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Nice take, Kath, always in touch with the music here, thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeletethanks for reading sean. though you've been so busy writing, I don't know when you find the time.
ReplyDeleteThis has alot of emotion in it. Very well written.
ReplyDeletethanks deana, a lot of dark emotions...sometimes it's more fun that way. thanks for stopping by.
ReplyDeleteVery dark. I wonder if it might be a bit stronger with the change of one word. The line: She looked at him. What about saying "She looked to him". That seems to work better
ReplyDeleteYes, would definitely work. Thanks for the suggestion and for reading.
DeleteI like this. But I gotta ask, just to make sure my head's in the right place - "she" is a protege to a criminal and the verge of going her own way in the seedy underbelly ... ?
ReplyDeleteTo a point, in my mind she was a teenage runaway, sold to the streets and deciding she no longer needed a "manager" Thanks for reading Eric.
ReplyDeleteThat last line - damn!
ReplyDeletedamn yes, or damn no?
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